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Puk
11-09-06, 09:17 AM
I wrote this short story earlier in the year for a laugh.
I am going to put the first two chapters up today, then 1 more every day for a week. (There are eight chapters)
Read along if you are interested,
Puk.




HIGHLANDS OF THE HEART
1.
Dale had been coming back here every year for as long as he could remember. First with his dad when he couldn’t draw enough of a bow to swat a fly with. Then he came alone as he grew, after his father hung up his bow, was confined to a wheelchair in their home at the base of the mountains and eventually lost all of his old stories to the haze of Alzheimer’s disease. The end when it came for him was a blessed relief.

Now he brought his own son, partly from tradition, partly for his old man, and partly to spend some time with his boy away from the rush of the world and the schools that teach boys by making them write things down. He recalls that he didn’t learn well that way when he was a boy. He was born to run, born to learn by doing, by smelling the musky soil, the crisp sweetness of the earth after rain. He remembers the joy of it all when he was a boy, learning to love his land and this Australian mountain country, to love the animals that ran here. He watches his boy now with pride swelling his chest, as he sees him turn and take in the virgin bush-land.

Ryan seems to be drinking in the atmosphere, absorbing the bush through his skin by osmosis, until the look on his face tells his father that all his senses are overloaded.

Ryan can tell that it is pointless trying to explain everything that he is feeling, smelling, seeing, hearing. At school, he is “just a kid”, gangly, not the best student, he feels kind-of “caged”. But out here, well, he feels like he belongs out here.

Dale can tell that finally his son has stopped categorising his world, trying to make sense of it, and has surrendered to simply becoming a part of it. He has become one with the bush. His senses are sharpening. He is listening, smelling, tasting the bush like a bloodhound picking up a trail. He is finding that thing inside him which Dale hoped was there. Something that harks back to the cavemen, with their spears and stones. He is ready, finally ready. He is ready to hunt.

2.
“You see that deer sign, mate?”
“yeah Dad, you thought I had missed it, didn’t you? One doe with a good stag following her. Not one of the giant reds you and Granddad used to tell me hid in these mountains, but he wouldn’t be too bad. Should we head up the mountain and glass for a while? Might even see The Ghost!” He said with a cheeky grin back at his Father.

“Smart-arse kid” Dale thought to himself. He had tried to explain to his son about the other reason that he kept coming back to the mountains behind their ancestral home, but Ryan had looked at him like he was telling a fishing story.

The Ghost. He was real! He had seen him once last year and a few times before that and Dale was determined to take him before something or someone else did. They only let a few mates bow-hunt these hills, and didn’t allow rifles, but you never can tell these days. That and the fact that The Ghost only got smarter every year meant that he had to get him soon or he might miss his chance. ‘Well…’ Dale thought to himself with a wry smile. ‘Maybe he will get that smart that no hunter will ever take him, myself included. Kind of seems right in a way, that a majestic phantom of the bush like him should die of old age peacefully. It would be better than what happened to the old stag that had to have been his Father. Boy, had he heard that story a thousand times…..

Ryan broke into his ponderings with an urgent hand signal which Dale caught out of the corner of his eye, and his answer was one raised eyebrow, which from a man that never said much was enough to ask “What is it, son”?

Ryan cupped a hand to his ear and this time Dale heard it: a distant roar, answered and then answered a second time. There were some stags about, but still a good distance. Not “The Ghost” (he could tell by the roar) but not bad, and definitely worth checking out. Cursing himself for being so deep in his thoughts that he had failed to hear it, the older man thought to himself that if he was ever going to be able to teach his son anything, he had better get his game face on. “My boy is ready to hunt, am I?

“The Ghost” wasn’t just a name that described the way the massive stag moved through the bush like a wraith, silent and ethereal. It was also a name that described something that lived deep within Dale, something he had never even told Ryan about. That deer haunted him. Every time he thought about it, which was often, it left him with the memory of his Father, a man he had loved and respected. He wanted to take the descendant of the stag that had escaped his Dad. To do it for him. For dad. To finish the story. To lay that ghost to rest.

to be continued......
Puk

NormGunston
11-09-06, 10:14 AM
Puk, thanks for inviting us to join you for a yarn around the 'virtual' campfire. Themes concerning "men's business" seem to be appreciated around this forum- perhaps because they strike a common chord in us blokes that rings of traditional bush values.
For our old man to decide we have '... become one with the bush' is the greatest honour a boy can be paid.
Keep the billy boiling- looking forward to the next installment.

robbbo
11-09-06, 01:35 PM
Puk ,
Thanks for sharing with us,my father and I spent many great times together in bush and reading your first installments bought a flood of memories,looking forward to the next chapter
Andrew :)

Hefty
11-09-06, 02:20 PM
I'm hanging on every word!!!
Can't wait for the next chapter. Hurry up big bro!

Jono.

XTfreak
11-09-06, 06:09 PM
I'm hanging on every word!!!
Can't wait for the next chapter.
Me too!! Thanks for sharing it with us.
Bill

Puk
12-09-06, 05:57 PM
I changed my mind.
2 chapters again today, as they are fairly short.
1 a day from now on.
Hope you're enjoying it.
Puk

3.

“I only ever got within range of him once” his Dad used to say. It was the classic precursor to the story, and the whole family would roll their eyes, groan to themselves and settle into their chairs to let the old man tell his tale. The details were the same every time, and they had memorised every word, but they loved him enough to let him tell it, because the light that came into his eyes, and the excitement in his voice when he spoke of his time in the bush chasing that demon red stag were wonderful to see and hear.

“I had hunted him for four seasons, four ruts, and never got close. I had only seen him a few times. The first time I didn’t believe my own eyes. It had been just an instant, a glimpse, and my pulse had run fast. I knew then that I had a quest to fulfil up here. I had to take him. No matter how long it took. But man he was smart. He used the wind like a tall ship and he seemed to watch where his big old hoofs hit the dirt, to make sure that he wouldn’t leave too much sign for a determined bowhunter like me to follow. I swear he had a sense that the books don’t tell you about, he always seemed to know when I was there. I would have the wind right and make no sound and still he would swivel, and those big eyes would stare right into me like he knew what I was trying to do. He would melt away like a wisp of smoke.”


A roar that shook the air had Ryan spinning to look at his Dad. “Boy”, Dale thought, “do I look as excited as him?” Ryan’s mouth was open like he was panting for air, and his eyes were like saucers. “Was it him?” He mouthed, and Dale simply nodded. “Let’s go find him Son” Dale uttered out of the side of his mouth, and the 11 year old nodded jerkily. The Ghost was calling.

4.
It was still early morning, and the roar had come from lower than them on the mountainside. Good, the wind was into their faces and the thermals would keep it coming up the hill as the ground heated up with the promise of some high country sun. Dale surveyed the rugged outbreaks of rock, thick choked gullies and white, gnarled mountain gums that writhed skywards gasping for the pale sunlight like a hanged man gasps for his last breath. He felt that if he had to choose where to run and hide, it would be here. This was a primal, tortured part of the bush, where the fight to survive took no prisoners. It was the way it had been since time eternal. The Ghost had to be here. Here in the heart-land. Here where the screeching of the nectar-eating birds and native wrens let you know when you were moving too fast, where the noise through the scrub that sets your heart pounding against your chest is just a departing kangaroo, where the world spreads out below, but could be a million miles away. There is only “here”. There is only that big deer.

As Dale prepared to once again battle with The Ghost, he thought “I hope I don’t blow my chance like Dad did” and his father’s story came to him again:
“That one time I got close enough I had seen him walk up a gully in the hills and something in my gut had told me that he had to come back down it. He might have gone out the top over the hill, sure, but I just had this feeling. It was nearing evening, and as the earth cooled the air was moving down the hillside, so my scent wouldn’t go to him. I waited. I waited. When he roared I thought I was going to faint. What a sound! The hairs on the back of my neck stood up and a shiver went down my spine. There was no question as to who owned these mountains, and I felt like a trespasser in his domain. Then as I watched from behind my tree he was there. I didn’t see him move, just all of a sudden there was a deer where there wasn’t one before. He was massive, and he had to lower his antlers to get between some of the trees.
I raised my old hunting recurve (Not like the fancy compounds you youngsters have these days) and drew the bow while I was still behind the tree. As I stepped out to clear the bow the rock I put my foot on rolled on its side. I sprained my ankle and he was gone. I don’t which hurt the most, the ankle or the blown stalk.

It was a long and painful walk home, and I promised myself to be more careful next year.”

to be continued....
Puk

Puk
13-09-06, 08:17 AM
Chapter 5.

“He moves well in the scrub”, Dale thought to himself with surprise. He had wondered if Ryan would be a bit clumsy, as he was a gangly youth who didn’t look like he had grown into his feet and legs yet. But he didn’t make much noise in the scrub, he watched where he put his feet, he didn’t complain about the long hours taken without the chance to have a shot. “He might be a hunter after all”, he thought, knowing that not all men were born to the hunt, and hoping that his son had inside him “what it takes”. “But I still have to remember that he is only 11”, Dale thought as he watched him growing tired with the long hours of following this stag that may as well have been as invisible as the spirit after which Dale had named him.

“Sit down and take off your pack, mate.” Ryan looked at him gratefully, his legs hurting. Dale knew Ryan needed to rest, “but I can’t spare the wasted time” he thought. So he left Ryan to sit and rest, to have a nap for an hour if he needed to, marked the spot on his hand-held GPS and set off. After all, they had the radios. If there was any trouble he would come for him. And Ryan knew not to move away from the GPS mark.

Dale moved up the hill and was glassing the next ridges. He had spent about 40 minutes scouting over the next ridge and moved his way back to the crest above where he had left Ryan, walking all the time with an arrow nocked and his release attached. Sometimes you didn’t get a second to prepare. You had to be ready.

He was about to give up on The Ghost for another day, when all of a sudden his UHF crackled: “Dad, dad, I woke up, and there was a huge stag standing 20 metres away! It had to be the ghost! He ran as I went for my bow, he is racing up the hill from me!”

Crouching on the well-worn game path a few hundred metres directly up the hill from Ryan, time slowed down for Dale. He looked up at the sound of clattering hooves, like might be made by a deer in full flight, and there, at a full run, came The Ghost, spooked from being as close to a human as he had ever been, and intent on being in the next post code.

As it ran straight at him, Dale wondered if he would end up like his own Father. He started to flinch in fear. Do I shoot? Will I have time? What if I miss? The end of his Dad’s story flashed through his mind. The sad part, the part that defined his dying years:

to be continued.....
Puk

Puk
14-09-06, 07:15 AM
Hi all,
I'll post the last two chapters tomorrow to see out the working week.
Hope it's not boring you too much.

6.
“So I prepared like I never had before. Practicing on the target butt all through the off season. Fletching those wooden shafts and cresting them until they were works of art. A stag the size of “him” deserved nothing less. Near the end of the rut I found him, after worrying that he was gone. I had worked so hard, and there I found him, it had to be him, but how I wish that it wasn’t. I knew it was him from the scars on his face and his sheer size, but he was ruined, desecrated in the worst way. This is our land, it has been for generations, and no one hunts with rifles here. But there he was, wasted. Two bullet holes illustrated his fate. He had died thrashing in pain, and made a mess of the patch of shrubs where I found him, almost like he was taking his rage out on the mountain. Whatever mongrel poacher shot him didn’t even take his cape, didn’t allow him to be seen in his full glory, as a mount to admire. They hacked out his antlers, sawed them off at the skull and left him there. Left him like a lump of meat, not the regal ruler of these hills. The foxes and wedge-tails had begun to take him back in to the life-cycle of the mountains, and so I walked away and left some of my youth up there with him. Sure, I took lots of other deer in my time, even taught you how to take ‘em too, and you can see the mounts I have in the den, but none of these even come close to that big fella. Son, I was robbed that day, cheated not only of an animal, but of a quest, a purpose. Take your chance when it comes, boy, because you might not get another one”

Dale had always felt sad for his Father after he told that story. Every time he got to the end his face that was shining with conviction and passion and fire would seem to shrink a little, and the strength that coursed through him when he recalled his days as a mountain man would flow out of his shoulders until he was a little, hunched old shell of a man again.

to be continued tomorrow....
Puk

Hefty
14-09-06, 07:55 AM
Man, I'm loving this story. Can't wait to see how it turns out.

Jono.

PeterM
14-09-06, 08:20 AM
You are a true wordsmith IMO mate!

XTfreak
14-09-06, 05:43 PM
Great Story!!! I can hardly wait until tomorrow.
Bill

ricochet
14-09-06, 06:39 PM
keep it coming Puk, been great so far :D


Rick :)

Puk
15-09-06, 07:09 AM
Well boys and girls, here is the rest.
Thanks for sharing in my short fiction.
Putting something like this out there is actually a lot more nerve-wracking than i would have thought.
Puk


7.
As all this went through his mind in an instant, Dale’s thoughts returned to the moment, and his vision crystallised like a camera lens snapping into focus.

“Not me”, Dale thought. “Not this time”. He stood his ground, and with one fluid motion he threw up his bow and drew. His old friend felt like a falcon coming home to roost as it worked into its deadly curve, and as his fingers hit his lips his release seemed to trigger of its own accord as all of Dale’s practice, all the years of mastering this ancient art distilled into one poetic action. The Ghost was looking back over his shoulder, and when the bush in front of him made an unexpected and lethal move he spun towards it and tried to stop. But it was too late.

As soon as his brain sent the signal to flee he was normally gone, but this time the signal wasn’t obeyed. His heart had stopped sending the blood that his legs needed to move properly. It had been transfixed, pierced by a shaft that bore, strangely enough, the same cresting that this mountain had seen 30 years before, on the arrows of Dale’s father. Dale had found an old arrow and copied his Father’s pattern, on carbon rather than cedar, resolving that The Ghost would fall to an arrow that would make his dad proud.

Dale wanted to leap aside but was paralysed at the sight of 14 deadly points coming at him like a spike-encrusted avalanche. “I’m dead”, he thought. Suddenly he saw The Ghost stagger, and at a dead run, he ploughed into the dirt, coming to rest so close that after 30 racing beats of his own heart, Dale reached out from where he stood and touched him with the bottom limb of his bow.

It was over. The journey was complete. Passion, purpose, betrayal, loss and now fulfilment. The Ghost had been laid to rest.

8.
The usual emotions felt after a great shot and a quick humane death washed over Dale. Joy, relief, excitement as well as sorrow for such a magnificent animal. Gratitude to The Ghost, for “choosing” him as the one who would take his life, almost like he had known that the respect Dale had shown him in life would carry on in death, and he would be treasured as the trophy of a lifetime. Actually, of two lifetimes.
Then Dale felt something burst inside him, and he could not control himself any longer. For some reason he didn’t understand Dale sank to his knees and wept. He couldn’t fathom why. What was his son going to think: An Aussie bush hunter crying like a little child over a deer!

Ryan came running up and looked at his Dad. He saw the tears streaming down his face. Quietly he rested his bow on the ground and put his arm around his dad’s shoulder and said three words.
Lost in the swirling whirlpool of emotions: of joy and grief and some others that he couldn’t identify, Dale didn’t hear him for a minute, or at least, the words didn’t register. Then he realised what Ryan had said: “For Granddad, hey?”

How had this boy known what had been going through him for so many years? He thought that he had kept it to himself. Had he been that easy to read? Then he understood what it was. Ryan had heard the stories. It dawned on Dale that his son was sensitive to the traditions, to the land, to the mixed emotions of the kill but also the love his Father had for his own father. He realised that Ryan understood.
“Yeah mate,” Dale said, “for Granddad.”

Whatever else he had to teach him, he knew this much already.
In the best sense of the word, his son truly was a hunter.
And his journey was just beginning.

The End.

Puk 2006

NormGunston
15-09-06, 07:30 AM
Putting something like this out there is actually a lot more nerve-wracking than i would have thought.

Very gutsy thing to do. Well worth the effort.

Hefty
15-09-06, 08:34 AM
An Aussie bush hunter crying like a little child
Mate, I had tears in my eyes just reading it. No kidding.

Awesome story.

Jono.

ricochet
15-09-06, 08:52 AM
well done Puk, top effort, great read :D , can see a major novel coming out very soon :lol:

Rick

Warlocke
15-09-06, 09:23 AM
Great read, Puk.

Thank you.

robbbo
15-09-06, 10:46 AM
Looking forward to the next one Puk agreat read :)
Andrew

XTfreak
15-09-06, 05:21 PM
Awsome read. Thankyou very much for sharing it with us.
When is the next one?
Bill